Dear Dr. Frauenfelder,
I have carefully read your paper also in comparison to the first submitted version and I have found a large number of issues that I would have commented in the earlier version now carefully revised in the present Version 4. Earlier reviews have commented a lot on the thermal permafrost content in this paper, so I focussed a little bit more on the geological and slope instability content of this paper.
I made comments on a number of issues relating to
>the introduction of the structural and geological controls of the rock slope failure
>the mechanical explanation of the failure
>the terminology
>the structural interpretation
>and the way permafrost could have played a role.
However, even if there is quite a number of these comments, they are all minor revisions in my view. I hope they will help to make some statements including the key statement of a potentially permafrost-affected rock slope failure clearer. I also added some comments on thermal conditions in steeo structured rock faces.
Including these comments, I can see that this paper is a valuable contribution to better understanding preparatory conditions of rock slope failures in permafrost-affected rock walls in a setting that is quite different from previously reported Alpine conditions.
Thus, I suggest to publish this paper subsequent to a number of minor revisions revisions listed below
Good luck with the revision
Michael Krautblatter
P2, L25: >I think you should include a statement that the evidence of permafrost-related destabilisation is not only derived (abductively) from observation, where the relative importance of permafrost degradation remains difficult to prove, but also supported by (inductive/deductive) mechanical studies that explain the underlying physics and processes of destabilisation. Without mechanical papers by Mellor, Davies, Guenzel, Dviwedi, Arenson, this statement could not be validated physically.
P3, L1: “Large-scale rock-slope failures pose a significant geohazard in the fjords and valleys of western and northern Norway (Blikra et al., 2006).”
>I think you should update and specify this comment since, especially as Norway has a very elaborated ranking of rock slope failure hazards now.
P5, L9: “Low resolution data was collected to enable the visualization and modelling of a large area of the mountainside. Higher resolution data was collected at specific zones 10 near the failure zone and its surrounding areas to enable a geomechanical interpretation.”
>Specify the resolution of LiDAR especially for the term “Higher resolution data”, since this affects the geomechanical interpretation that can be achieved.
P5, L13: In the previous version you speak about “The extremely irregular surface as well as large amounts of snow and ice present resulted in the development of a mesh with numerous larger data holes”
>can Specify the range of dimensions of these ”numerous” holes, since they can camouflage/affect the geomechanical interpretation.
P5, L19 “The volume of the 2008 rock avalanche was computed using the 2012 TLS data by delineating a pre-failure surface based on adjacent slope topography bounding the scarp. The differential volume between the 2012 TLS data and the pre-failure surface was 20 computed using standard 3-dimensional techniques, as presented, e.g., by Lato et al. (2014)..”
>It is quite common that there is not sufficiently resolved 3D DEM before the failure, but please explain from where you took your constraints to interpolate the prior surface. Looking at Figure 4 it seems that the reconstruction of a former surface not straightforward.
P6, L2 “Where possible, a vertical distance of several meters to the flat terrain was chosen, however, this was not possible at all of the sites, which has some implications on the interpretation of the results (cf. chapter 4).”
>Please specify for which sensors this applies and whether these logger have been affected by snow accretion
>The specification for rock wall loggers also relies on a minimum steepness of rock faces (often >60°) where snow does not accumulate on the rock face – have you checked the steepness?
Figure 4: I would not use the term “rock avalanche” used for highly mobilised (low fahrboschung/ energy line angles <15°, which your event does not have) high-magnitude (>1 mio. m³) events with– rock slope failure is a more appropriate term.
Figure 5: “Figure 5. Kinematic analysis of the bedding planes for the sliding failure. The green line represents the orientation of the natural slope surface before failure, the white circle represents an estimated friction cone of 30° and the green cone represents the sliding daylight window for the associated pre-failure surface.”
>This Figure needs a more elaborated explanation
>It is difficult to read it without having any kind of geomechanical background, which should be described in at least in 4-5 lines in the introduction. Type of geology, discontinuity patterns, deglaciation history…
>For the readership of the Cryosphere you should explain your geomechanical analysis in a way they have a chance to understand it
>Please be careful with attributing the failure to a "bedding plane"
> From what I can see in Figure 1, there are persistent, vertical to subvertical, bended joint sets that predefine possible failure planes. These also seem to have at least partially a fine-grained infill.
>Pure or dirty ice infill can add certain limited (2 MPa) tensile strength to the vertical to subvertical, bended joint sets in the rock mass prior to failure and affect the sliding resistance.
>As it is presented now, I cannot really understand the point you want to make with this Figure 5
>I only have Fig. 1 to judge the geology and no background information is provided in your article, but your “complex wedge” is composed of an intersection of at least three sets of discontinuities and I strongly recommend you to give the reader some more background structural information on the rock face which must have certainly been recorded by the NGI.
P7, L8 Values defining the subsurface properties (heat capacity, thermal conductivity, porosity) were obtained from representative sites nearby
>Please state that they (especially porosity) can vary significantly and have quite an influence on the thermal behaviour
P7, L2: “Our results are valid for areas that are assumed not to be influenced by a snow cover, i.e., the steep rock-faces of Polvartinden. The main source of uncertainty for the three-dimensional modelling is related to the extrapolation of the MARST”
>Structured rock faces like yours have quite a significant snow cover an this can be a major error source for your model. Please check recent papers by A. Haberkorn.
P8, L4: “The discontinuity ordination data are plotted on a stereonet in Figure 5. 20 The bedding planes have been identified as the failure surface from the terrestrial laser scanning data and from interpretation of the GigaPan photography. The green line in Figure 5 represents the orientation of the natural slope surface, and the green circle represents the corresponding daylight window. The white cone depicts an estimated friction surface of 30°. Poles that are contained outside of the white circle but within the green circle are kinematically unstable and represent potential sliding failure planes (Goodman, 1995). The stereonet demonstrates that the bedding surface orientation is steeper than the estimated 25 friction angle, but shallow enough to daylight with respect to the slope face. The bedding surface meets, therewith, the kinematic requirements of a sliding failure posing a potential rockfall hazard (see e.g., Hasler et al., 2012).”
>I only have Fig. 1 to judge the geology and no background information is provided in your article, but your “complex wedge” is composed of an intersection of at least three sets of discontinuities and I strongly recommend you to give the reader some more background structural information on the rock face which must have certainly been recorded by the NGI. |